Thesis statement: staying at hometown is much better than travelling always.
Supportive sentences:1)travelling always is tiring for people.
For example: travelling to a cıty with bus very tiring for me.
2)We can face lots of new cultures and new countries and it is difficult to accustomed to living there.
For example:lots of foreign people face culture shock in different countries.
3)We have a family and we can not leave them alone always.
For example:lots of partners dıvorce because of long travellings for work and other reasons.
4)We can not have a proper life.
For example: people who always travel can not stay a certain place and they have't got a house for living.
Opponent ideas: travelling bring new things and it is exciting to meet new people.
ıt ıs boring to stay the same place .
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Your thesis statement is "staying at hometown is much better than travelling always." First of all, do not use "always" here. If you use "constantly", it will be much better. Moreover, in your thesis statement you should mention why staying at hometown is better. If you state your reasons using phrases or words, it will be better.
YanıtlaSilWe don't use "with bus", we use "by bus".
Is experiencing new cultures and new countries something bad? While I was reading your sentence, I thought you would say something positive about traveling.
You didn't mention how you will refute the opponents' ideas. Their ideas also looks rational. You should convince your reader.